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TOPIC: ARGUMENT238 - The following appeared in a memorandum from the president of Mira Vista College to the college's board of trustees.

"At nearby Green Mountain College, which has more business courses and more job counselors than does Mira Vista College, 90 percent of last year's graduating seniors had job offers from prospective employers. But at Mira Vista College last year, only 70 percent of the seniors who informed the placement office that they would be seeking employment had found full-time jobs within three months after graduation, and only half of these graduates were employed in their major field of study. To help Mira Vista's graduates find employment, we must offer more courses in business and computer technology and hire additional job counselors to help students with their resumés and interviewing skills."
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DATE: 2010-7-16 17:53:46

In this memorandum, the president suggests to offer more courses in business and computer technology courses in Mora Vista College (MVC) and to hire more counselors to help students. To prove his suggestion is a reasonable one, the president cites evidences that students from Green Mountain College (GMC) have higher job rates and MVC’s students have difficulties in finding jobs. But these evidences cannot sustain the suggestion well.

First, the president considers that these two colleges are same just because GMC is near MVC. Since he does not give us any other information about these two colleges, I have reasons to suspect these colleges are different in many aspects. Perhaps, for example GMC is a business college so that more business courses in GMC are not surprise. Contrary, MVC is an industry college, and students in this college learn latest industrial techniques. There is no need to offer more business courses to these students because these courses have no help for students find industrial jobs.

Moreover, although GMC and MVC are the same type of colleges, the president does not prove that it is the business courses and job consultations that help to improve GMC students’ job rates. Maybe lacking business courses and job consultations are not the only difference that MVC is from GMC. Without details of the two colleges and without careful investigation about these differences, the president’s suggestion is unwarranted.

Then, full-time and professional-related jobs are not judgments of good and bad jobs. The president cannot assert that jobs which do not relate to profession are not good jobs. It might perhaps that these jobs provide more salaries and pleasant working environments. For this reason MVC have no need offer more business courses and to their students.

In addition, the president mentions computer causes in his suggestion. This is an ungrounded conclusion because through out the article the president does not mention the word computer except here.

In sum, due to lacking information, the president's suggestion may not suitable. To boaster it the president should provides us more information about these two colleges.

比想象中的难写这篇
实际上都是在攻击两个学习不同，感觉很无力